Saturday 19 November 2011

Episode 8 - Revised

This is a looong episode! It will definitely need some serious cropping but there is a lot of information to get in...

A Furry Delivery
Main points
- Greg gets to work early
- He secretly collects a delivery from the back door
- Places the box under a work surface in the kitchen
- A few hours later a lot of staff take a break and Greg goes to the box but finds there is a hole chewed in the corner
- He hears a customer scream from the front
- She has seen the rat running over her feet
- HSA and Police arrive
- Maj is arrested for breaching H&S laws
- Greg is now Manager and grabs the clipboard and badge from Maj
- A receipt fall out of his pocket
- Harold sees it and gives it to Heema
- She shows the HSA people and confronts Greg
- They see it has his details on it
- Greg is demoted by Maj
- Harold is promoted

NEW:
Greg gets to work early today and seems to be hanging around the back door. Suddenly there is a delivery at the back gates, it is from the pet shop. Greg rushes out to get it and stuffs the box under a work surface in the kitchen hen he comes back in.

A few hours pass and most of the staff are on break. Greg sees a chance to go back to the box, but finds that there is a hole chewed through the corner. Suddenly a customer screams, she has seen a rat running over her feet. The entire diner empties at the drop of a hat and soon after the Health Standards Agency arrive with the Police.

Maj is arrested for breaching severe health and safety regulations as Heema and the others plead her case. Greg on the other hand feels his plan couldn't have gone any better; he snatches the clipboard from Maj and rips the managerial badge from her shirt. However as he does, a receipt falls from his pocket. Harold spots it and grabs it. It is from the pet store...for 4 rats. Too shy to speak up himself, Harold hands the paper to Heema. She immediately realises what has happened and shows it to the Health Standards Agents and confronts Greg. He denies it, but when the card details are found to match Greg's, Maj is released.

Since the rats weren't wild, there was no real danger. This leaves Greg's future in Maj's hands. She makes an unexpected decision; Maj doesn't fire Greg...she demotes him. Knows this would hurt more than anything. At the same time she promotes Harold to Deputy Manager for finding the receipt.

OLD:
Greg gets to work uncharacteristically early today and is hanging around the back door. Suddenly there is a delivery at the back gates of the diner that Greg rushes out to collect. Waiting outside is a pet shop van, with the owner standing at the back holding a large box; Greg peeks in the box and takes it from the owner’s hands. When coming back in, Greg places the box underneath a work surface in the kitchen and kicks it to the back, obscuring it from view.
A few hours have passed and a lot of the other staff are taking their lunch break, this is Greg’s opportunity to sneak back into the kitchen and take care of the package he collected earlier. However when Greg goes back to the box, he finds that there is a hole chewed through the bottom corner. He quickly runs out the back and throws the box into the dumpster, feeling that his plan went better than he originally hoped. When coming back into the kitchen he hears a scream come from the front of the diner. A customer has seen a rat running by her feet! The entire diner empties of customers as they run from the rats…soon after, the Health Standards Agency arrives.
The police are called and being the Manager; Maj is arrested for breaching some severe Health and Safety Regulations. Everyone has gathered round to see Maj leave, and unfortunately for the others, this means that Greg is now automatically promoted from Deputy to Manager, his dreams and aspirations have finally been realised. Greg snatches the Managerial Badge and clipboard from Maj as she is taken away, but as he does a receipt falls out of his pocket…it is from a pet store, for 4 rats. Harold spots this and quickly picks it up, too shy to speak up himself, he gives the receipt to Heema telling her it has fallen from Greg’s pocket. She immediately realises what has happened and runs after Maj showing the Head of the Health Standards Agency. Greg instantly denies it, but when they check the card that has been used to pay for the rats and see that it matches the number on Greg’s card; all becomes clear that Greg was the one who brought the rats into the diner.
The decision is left in Maj’s hand as to what happens to Greg, She decides that the best punishment would be to demote Greg, never allowing him to become manager of any Quick Stop Diner. Maj knows this would cut Greg deeper than losing his job completely. At the same time, for saving Maj’s career, she makes Harold the Deputy manager.

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